Comments for Miracle of Rare Device

Comment on “No, the cat had not come back” by Brodie

Brodie — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 00:54:20 +0000

AMAZING!! I love it. I especially enjoyed how very unsure you made me about whether the cat was a ghost or not at the end– it really didn’t matter, it was all metaphorical and stuff Genius work. I award you the Smile Ribbon and upgrade your ghost cat from indifferent to ambivalent. miss you and the Amanda!

Comment on Sufficiently death matched by Tony

Tony — Thu, 15 Apr 2010 01:44:12 +0000

Thanks for your reply–and the reaffirmation of my dark fictional tendencies. This just goes to show you can never please everyone, (happy ending/twisted ending) so there’s no point in trying. Thanks again!

Comment on Sufficiently death matched by Thomas

Thomas — Thu, 15 Apr 2010 01:36:01 +0000

The original Dervish was better. The back-and-forth between the kid and dad and the “Dervishes do it whirling” detail could stay, but (as usual) the darker version wins.

Comment on The Dead Pet Shop by beau

beau — Thu, 19 Nov 2009 02:38:33 +0000

I loved this story. Nice job easing me into the emotions of the girl.

I like how the frustrated writer is a recurring theme in your stuff. Ex. the poet in Sould who couldn’t turn a phrase after he sold his soul. And in some ways, Frankenstein in the audition short story. It’s always funny and honest.

The ending was absolutely perfect.

Here are a couple of things I noticed:

pg 2, That 2nd sentence is a little awkward, maybe I’m reading it wrong. Also, on line 7 it says, “he’d would…”

4th line from the bottom of pg 5, “And by then end…”

Comment on What I’ve been up to by danielle

danielle — Sun, 20 Apr 2008 23:32:50 +0000

at the school i work at, you can major in “book arts.” the room where the classes take place is down the hall from my office and it looks pretty cool! good luck with your many projects!

Comment on Virgil was still the frog boy… by beau

beau — Wed, 19 Dec 2007 23:03:29 +0000

Brilliant! That was a fun read.

Comment on Writing a Novel by drweezer00

drweezer00 — Tue, 07 Aug 2007 05:26:36 +0000

I think this method could definitely work for a screenplay. My first thought was to say that a screenplay’s sensory elements come through most in the actual making of the film: ie the shots and the nuances of the actors. But that is not the case at all. If the writer of a screenplay has a clear sense of character yearning, and how that yearning affects the way they experience their world through their sense, then it is bound to come out through the dialogue as well as in the general development of the story. All this boils down to is that great stories are not told from the intellect, they are told from the unconscious.

Comment on Writing a Novel by Beau

Beau — Mon, 06 Aug 2007 22:49:27 +0000

I want to try this for a short story sometime, but in the meantime I wonder how this technique would apply to a screenplay. Most books give you to the opposite approach: write down only the abstractions, the gist of what happens in a scene. At first it seems like a screenplay could only benefit from that approach, given the emphasis on structure. But it would be interesting to explore the characters first before the plot…and it could probably make it a lot easier if you were writing a TV spec script for an existing show. I will try this out.

Comment on A Rare Device: Poetry by Beau

Beau — Tue, 24 Apr 2007 21:14:40 +0000

Great read for a dreary day like today. That last one was really cool with the haiku right in the middle. Kind of like Tarantino putting anime in the middle of Kill Bill, hehe.

Comment on Passers-by (a short story) by beau

beau — Tue, 10 Apr 2007 07:10:16 +0000

Very nice, I’m noticing bits of style that could only be yours, like tops of volcanoes popping out of the ocean. I started working with Kevin on my screenplay, which means I’m really writing, but also that it’s very difficult. Aren’t you in Houston? I’ll call you tomorrow.